Thoughts on my poem???????????????

I like how articulate this is but its got a lot of potential to be misinterpreted. I missed the point on this one at first. I had to read it 3 or 4 times to understand. Thank you for giving an explination. I was very entertained once I read the meaning. You do sound somewhat pretentious and whiney. Almost like your sad in this one bud. Try keeping it simple so its not so loosly translated.